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1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« on: December 12, 2008, 04:54:27 AM »
Hey guys.So I'm making a Fan-Fic and I need pointers I don't have anything yet but it is coming I promise. ;D ;D ;D ;D

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #1 on: December 12, 2008, 05:56:48 AM »
Prologue: On the 18 of the 12 2002 Alex was very very happy because he had designed                       a cure for the horrible disease of vampires. He was also happy because he knew he would be rolling around in cash when the cure was shown to the world. He could see it now: living in a mansion, having a personal butler for all his needs and being spoon feed by Pamela Anderson.


19/12/02 (The next day)


It was only two o’clock in the morning and Alex already had about one thousand unhappy vampires trying to break his door down to get the cure mixture. Unfortunately Alex slept naked and about half a dozen vampires saw his stuff through his window. Alex quickly got changed and went outside and shouted “Can’t a man get five minutes peace without some weirdo’s looking at his dinga ling” and this made all of the vampires laugh. “So why are you here” Asked Alex “We won’t the cure idiot” Said a boy from Hogwarts named Nate “O the cure I’m sorry I don’t have it on me you will need to come to the ministry today to get it” Said Alex sadly.



Two hours later

At the ministry it was such a busy day for Alex. He was selling his cure every second all day so far. Alex had no time for lunch for he was using every spare second he had on a daily basis selling his mixture. It was a horrible day for Alex but he was happy when Bucky and Isabelle came along to cheer him up so his day would be better.


That night
Alex was very tired from his day so he used his magic operated television with his magic operated Foxtel and watched the latest episode of Kyle XY and went to bed and fell asleep instantly.

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #2 on: December 13, 2008, 05:05:03 PM »
nice!

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #3 on: December 13, 2008, 09:10:10 PM »
Thankyou part two will come when more pepole post a comment in mine ;D ;D ;D ;D....

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #4 on: December 13, 2008, 09:30:07 PM »
k.

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #5 on: January 5, 2009, 01:40:52 AM »
Not bad...but is it meant to be so...funny? Kinda satire-ish. Could be more serious. Spelling is a little off and grammar too. But that doesn't really matter.

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #6 on: January 5, 2009, 01:54:09 AM »
What's satire-ish mean?




yeah it was sussposse to have that funny normal kind of vibe ;D ;D

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #7 on: January 6, 2009, 11:59:36 AM »
Satire is like being funny in a serious matter.

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #8 on: January 7, 2009, 04:45:10 AM »
That is what I meant it to be ;D ;D

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #9 on: January 17, 2009, 11:15:12 PM »
When are ya gonna continue?

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #10 on: January 18, 2009, 12:42:15 AM »
Soon

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #11 on: January 18, 2009, 05:17:13 AM »

                                                ~Next Morning~


Alex awoke to some broad knocks on the door, when he awoke, he answered the door to see two rather strong looking Ministry workers “We would like to escort you to Azkaban now Sir" said the tallest fellow, “Bu-but what for?” Asked young Alex, “For giving Vampires a potion that makes them aggravated so lives go” Said the shorter man, “No, No you don’t understand that was a cure for Vampires it must be a side affect!” Shouted Alex, “Did they know of this side-affect when they took it” Asked the tallest of the two men, “No” admitted Alex “But the vampires she could arrested not me” Said Alex.


Alex shot a fire ball at the two men and ran of to Bucky's home.

                              ~Bucky's Home~



When Alex arrived at Bucky's house he did his special knock on the front door and five seconds later Sirius Black answered the door and directed him to Bucky's room, when he knocked on the door Bucky replied with “enter”, Alex looked around and noticed that Bucky had lip stick all over his face and Isabelle Xantier was checking out Bucky's room Bucky looked shocked “Alex what are you doing here” Bucky asked Alex, “I’m running from the law it turns out my potion had a few unexpected side-affects” answered Alex, Bucky sighed “Come in” He said , Alex sat on the bed and inspected Bucky’s guitar “A Gibson Dot” Said Alex “Yes that’s right exactly you should think about a music career” Bucky told Alex, Alex thought ‘I know I should be a guitar maker player” Said Alex, Isabelle laughed “Weird occupation” She said, “not really  you know Les Paul had a similar occupation” Bucky told Isabelle.


                                         ~Ten hours later~
No one expected it but Alex was rocking out already on Bucky’s Dot, Bucky entered his room and saw Alex using his guitar “O.K it is time for the inventing part I don’t like you using my guitar” Bucky told Alex, so as you’d expect Alex made a similar Dot in four hours that ran on electric not magic someway that did not make sense to Bucky at all but it made perfect sense to Isabelle.


                                         ~2 O’clock~


“Stop playing that Bloody guitar” Shouted Isabelle “I need some rest I’m not a robot you idiot”, Bucky awoke “Isabelle you woke me up what’s going on?” Asked Bucky “Your friend is still playing guitar” Said Isabelle, “And?” Asked Bucky “It’s annoying” Said Isabelle, “And so’s your bragging” said Bucky half asleep. And with that Bucky fell asleep, Alex fell asleep still playing guitar and Isabelle sobbed herself asleep.

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #12 on: January 18, 2009, 05:20:34 PM »
lol, very funny. the very end is mean though for me. I DIDN'T BRAG. But its awesome!

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #13 on: January 18, 2009, 11:38:49 PM »
Yeah he was half asleep

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Re: 1st Fan-fic (Don't laugh at my stuff ups)
« Reply #14 on: February 17, 2009, 07:10:47 AM »
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