((Well, I don't know who you're asking, but I'll go ahead and put in my 2 cents anyhow. It was a good length, having two of those paragraphs is ideal, but as you can see, that doesn't happen often. It should have been "Oh such a pretty image." Some people also get mad if you drag out words, like you did in the word so. Instead of "says" you should use "said". It makes your writing seem much better. The sentence after the quote was a run on, I believe. Don't let the commas fool you into thinking they make it an ok sentence. You could probably make a new paragraph when you start talking about your memory, and then you could expand on that memory a little more.
Otherwise, it's good... it gets easier to write more and to write better the longer you stay here. I'm ashamed to look back at my first posts, but now I can write better and longer (if I want).))
Leah had begun to daydream about the wedding, and as she did, her mind opened to the thoughts of those around her, without a conscious command to do so. She came across Isabelle's train of thought and the emotions laced within it. She probed her mind slightly to gain more information, and then left Isabelle's thoughts in peace.
She smiled at the girl, knowing what had happened. Did Isabelle know that Leah had read her mind? It was possible, but in order to find out, Leah would just have to wait and see.
