Trapped in an Elevator

[Hermione_Granger]

Hi everyone. u know me, and i have my own fanfic. I love to write, and i have so many ideas. I guess i want to share them with you all!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

so, i would like to know if u guys would actually read and post if i wrote my story? its adventure.... i ohpe u like it. heres a taste of it write now.

oh, and to let u guys know, i have proff i have written this story, so if anyone copies it, they'll ne in toruble, coz im publishing it. THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Hermione_Granger]

The doors of the hotel swung open, being pushed open by a tall girl, and a very small little boy. They ran to the front desk, hugging, screaming and bouncing around, like they weren't aware of being scowled at by every person in the gigantic room.

'One hotel room, please,' the older girl breathed, her ocean-blue eyes shining threw a thick mop of tangled hair.

'Wheres your mother, father or guardian?' the plump woman behind the desk asked.

'What? Um, I think they're already here, or they're coming,' said the girl sheepishly, obviously not aware you needed an adult to be with you to check out in a hotel.

'You're not helping me. You should know,' said the woman angrily, thinking of the vauleble time of hers they were wasting.

'Oh, well...er, you see - ' the girl paused, taking her little brothers hand, and tried to innocently lean over the list of the vancancies.

'I'm - part of the Lestraws. Um, yes. He's my - Uncle,' she lied quickly, pulling her brother into her side so he couldn't say anything.

The plump woman looked suddenly very excited, pushed away the two small pieces of paper the girl was holding, and escorted them to the elevator.

'Mr. Lestraw is my favourite author! You won't believe how excited I was when he checked in to my hotel!' The woman babbled on, blind to the fact the kids didn't have luggage. She helped them into the elevator, which wasn't nescessary, and they were extremely relieved when the elevator closed and also seemed untensed.

[Hermione_Granger]

like it so far? i wont write anymore until sumone replies...it gets better!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Hermione_Granger]

...........anyone????? :o ......... ::)    :-[   :-\   :(   :'(

[Becca_Me]

Wow that is really good.  keep going!  yay! ;D

[Hermione_Granger]

cool, thx!! ok, sorry ive been away for awhile...

There were only four other people in the elevator, besides the dingy kids. A dark skinned, skinny woman wearing more riches than you would find in a bank; a man who was also dark skinned, scrawny, and clinging onto the womans arm; and old man, who was grinning slyly at the kids ; and one odd man, with a tweed hat on his head, a trench coat and big black boots.

'Excuse me,' the old man said to the girl, Eleanor.
She gulped. Would he know...?

'I couldn't but realize you were lying...Who are you, really?' the old man put his white hands into his jean pockets and smiled down at them, making him seem taller than he really was.

'Um...I'm Eleanor McCombes, and this is my brother, Tobey. We've been...sort of on a journey.' Eleanor mummbled, looking at the ground. The rich woman leaned away from her, and the trenched-coat man looked at the two kids with bright, shifty eyes. He fummbled with somehting in his pocket, when suddenly the elevator stopped. The lights flashed, on and off, and it seemed to drop, then go up again. They were screaming.

'What's happening?' the rich lady screamed, clasping onto her husbands skinny arm.

[Hermione_Granger]

Then it all stopped. The lights were off, and it was obvious what they were now. They were trapped in an elevator.

[Hermione_Granger]

Eleanor gasped, and winced in pain as she realized how hard ehr brother had been holding her arm.

'Elly? What happened?' Tobey asked quietly, tears streaming down his mooky face.

'I'm...not sure, Tob-tob,' Eleanor answered, using his baby name. She was frightened herself, and felt a twinge of anger and sadness at the fact that their mum and dad hadn't been there for her to ask the questions, and for ehr to cling on to.

'I believe the elevator stopped.' The old man said kindly.
'Here, have this, young one. it's choclate.'

He handed Tobey one, and one to Eleanor. He seemed nice. She usally would'nt've accepted candy from a stranger, but her fake mum and dad had always told ehr not to, and they weren't really her mum and dad, so why should she listen to them? She and Tobey gobbled up the candy.

[ateenangel]

What's next?  It's really good so far!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1