(It would help you understand the story better if you read Goblet's history)
Goblet's Bio History: Nearly all of his family is killed except for Goblet and his parents. Brother is unknown. Goblet barely killed the death eater that killed nearly all of his family in self defense when the death eater came to kill him at his current age of 14. Goblet discovered his powers a month before he killed the death eater. Since death eaters are expected to come for his family, Goblet and his living parents are separated so if the death eaters come for his parents, he won't die with them. And sadly, vice versa.
Goblet was at his house in the country, alone as always. He was back at his house for the holidays, though he didn't know why he didn't just stay at Hogwarts, or even go to his parents house. He found his owl Hermes (not Weasly Hermes) at his window and opened the expected letter from his parents. What his parents wrote was the same thing as always,"I'm sorry that you had to go away, but it was for the best. If something happened to you, nobody would know."
Goblet went down to his basement which he cleaned and organized everything that was there during the first two months he was at his new home. Goblet liked being down in the basement. It made him feel secure. Though there was one problem with the basement: About once every few months, somebody would end up there by accedent when they travel by portkey. People who end up there often yell at Goblet for thier mistake feeling it is best to put the blame on somebody. Goblet was finishing up his reply to his parents' letter, telling them that he will be all right. Then he closed up the letter, went outside to give the letter to his owl Hermes who was on a post drinking water. He noticed that it will be dark soon, but then he heard angry yelling...
This is my first fan fiction to write so if you give reviews, be honest. I swear I won't hold anything against you if you say anything negative. This isn't an RP.
very well writen for your first story. Make shere that we know your history and why things happen to( people don't always read the bio's) and also let people know if they can just interupt your story by adding themselves into it. It's ok if you want this to be a story about you and only you can write it.
Uh yeah sure.
Goblet looked up to find dozens of people riding brooms coming straight toward his house. Then what he saw next made his head turn ice cold: The Dark Mark. Goblet took a few steps back, then he saw green light coming from quite a few people on the brooms. Avada Kadarvra, the killing curse. Goblet knew this curse too well, as it is what killed nearly his entire family, even Goblet performed it on the wizard that killed his entire family when he was inches away from being killed.
Goblet dove to the side, the spell missing him from inches and the spell shattered a window. Goblet got into the house just as the death eaters just landed thier brooms. He ran through the house, not knowing where he was going, just trying to get away from those...people. Then he heard a door burst open. "D*** it!" yelled Goblet in anger. Loads of killing spells were soaring through the house. Goblet didn't know when to turn. "The basement," he thought. Goblet turned left and right, hoping his steps would lead him to the right place. "Downstairs!" thought Goblet. He was nearly there. Then a death eater appeared in front of him. "Avada-" the death eater started, but he was too slow. Goblet smashed him against a wall and then he thanked God that he was tall.
Goblet then jumped down the stairs and closed the door to the basement. He pointed his wand at the doorknob"Zemial!"
"The kid went in the basement! Alohoamora! D***! Doesn't work!" said somebody outside the basement. "We are going to have to break this door down." said another voice. Goblet grinned. But that went away just as soon he remembered where he was. "S***!" yelled Goblet. The door was banging loudly. Judging by the spell he just used, the door shouldn't open for about 15, 20 minutes. There wasn't a window in sight to get out of. He went to a wall and slid down on it, hands on his face and he was starting to face the facts. He was going to die. He can't take all those death eaters. Then he saw somebody appear out of nowhere, which couldn't be at a worse time.
Quote from: goblet_fulla_fire on June 25, 2005, 12:40:50 AM
Uh yeah sure.
yep. See most of the times the storys with Harry, Ron, Hermione, ect. are written by one person and the ones with use in them are written by mulitp people and also some people just don't really like having to read anther topic to understand what thier readign right then
I'm on the egde of my chair now keep going your doing outstaning
A girl appeared out of nowhere. Goblet knew why this happened. She took a portkey and wound up here on accendent. "What? Where am I? Where is sis? Hey you, where is sis?" questioned the girl. Goblet didn't do or say anything. If he knew the death eaters, they would come and kill her too. "Who is banging on the door? I'll get it!"said the girl. She was a few inches from the door when..."No!" yelled Goblet. "Why? They just want to get in. Wh-" "They are going to kill you,"interupted Goblet. "Funny."said the girl. "I would wish you would stop joking. Seeing as this isn't a very funny joke. They just want in, that's all." "GOD D***IT THAT"S NOT ALL! BECAUSE IF THEY GET IN HERE THAT WILL BE ALL! ALL THIS B******* IN LIFE YOU ENJOY THAT YOU THINK IS SO IMPORTANT, WELL YOU CAN JUST KISS ALL THAT GOODBYE!" Goblet ws standing up now. The girl was staring at him wide eyed. "There are death eaters outside that door. Turn the doorknob, and say goodbye."
"So, this isn't a joke?" asked the girl, quivering in her voice. Goblet just stared at the girl in anger. Anger that most of his family is dead, anger for feeling respsonsible for this girls death, anger...at those death eaters. "But the portkey-" started the girl but Goblet cut her off,"The portkey messed up. That is probably why you can't find your 'sis'." The girl walked around with a shocked expression on her face. She went up to a barrel and sat on it, hands in her face. "What's your name?" asked Goblet sympathetically. "Karen," she muffled. "Goblet," he replied. She didn't even ask why he had a wierd name. Goblet looked at his watch. Ten more minutes.
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Karen got her hands out of her face. "I have got to pull myself together. Don't panic. Plan it." Goblet stared at Karen in disbelief. "Plan?" said Goblet. "Plan?" he repeated. "The plan is-" Goblet grabbed Karen's collers "We are go-ing to-die. You would know that already if you know what a death eater is!" Karen feebelly shoved Goblet. "So what?! I don't care what we think of but we better think of something." "Think of what!? We're f*****!" yelled Goblet. Karen responded,"WELL WE BETTER DO SOMETHING BECAUSE I DON"T WANT TO DIE RIGHT NOW!"
Goblet heard a loud bang. A medium sized piece of the door was blown off. A hand stuck out of the hole and was reaching for the doorknob. Goblet, instead of using his wand, he picked up a rusty but sharp steak knife that was lying on top of some crates. "This one," Goblet whispered, "is for my sister." Goblet jammed the knife squarely in the hand. Blood popped out and the death eater was screaming in pain. Goblet took the knife back before the other death eater could take the knife out and use it for his own somehow.
Karen stared at the blood on the knife "You're heartless. Evil." Goblet walked to go sit down, still eyeing the spot where he stabbed the death eater's hand. Goblet looked down at his watch. Karen was right. He was. He killed a man using an illegal curse. "It was self defense," he told himself. "But you wanted to kill him, you wanted it to be slow and painful. "SHUT UP!!!" Karen jumped, "I d-didn't say anything." Goblet didn't respond.
Goblet had to think of a plan. Do something, because time was wearing thin with only 5 minutes to go.
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I am liking.. please continue
Five minutes. That thought has been stuck in his mind. He looked down. Now it was four. Goblet started sqeezing his hands so hard that he accedentally cut himself on the knife. Three minutes. Time was moving alful fast. "Go hide,' instructed Goblet. "Wha-" "Just do it, Karen. Karen did took a few moments to figure out where to hide. Then she hid behind a piller with some crates next to it. Goblet raced near the door, crouching next to it, trying to figure out what to do next. Suddenly the door bursted open.
"Avada Kadarvra!" yelled the death eater, the green light going towards...no. Goblet charged the death eater without thinking. Goblet forgot that he had a knife in his hand and accedentally sunk it in the death eater's thigh. Goblet and the death eater were both on the floor now. And Goblet knew that if he didn't do something quickly, the other death eaters are going to catch him off guard and kill him too.
Goblet immediately got behind the death eater on the floor had one arm choking the death eater slighty and the other with his wand out pointed straight towards the badly broken door. Using the death eater as a shield, Goblet was ready to say the words he wished upon every single death eater that ever lived. But nobody else came though the door.
Five minutes pasted, still nobody went through. Goblet looked to his left, seeing the barely visible body of Karen, with a crate over her body, an anger went through Goblet he felt only once before, the first time he took a life.
how long have you known her? but anyway keep going keepn going
Not very long. Goblet feels hate because he feels responsible for her.
oh...........that makes since ;)
Mmm. I really am, liking. Please comtinue. :)
yes please contiune
"F***, if she's dead. She better wake up right now or else I'm gonna kill you!" Then the crate on Karen moved. She got up and groaned. Now Goblet realized what happened, the spell hit the crate and it fell on Karen. But that didn't make Goblet feel any better. Karen went up to Goblet, who was now holding the death eater's neck and the his other arm on the knife that is in the thigh, moving it around painfully if the death eater's hand gets to close too it. "What are you doing? Get that knife out of him! He's a human being!" yelled Karen, pulling on the knife as the death eater screamed in pain. But Goblet was holding the knife even tighter. "STOP IT, KAREN! You take that knife out and it might kill him from all the pain that he is taking. BACK OFF KAREN!" Karen did what she was told, anger tears in her eyes. "Now," said Goblet calmfully, "how many death eaters are out there?" "Ehh, twenty...five." "D***." said Goblet. "Why are you the only one here?" Goblet asked demandedly. "Go to h***, Keith," Goblet moved the knife up towards the mid-stomach. "AAARRRRRRGH!!!!" "DO YOU WANT TO SEE IF THIS KNIFE CAN REACH YOUR RIBCAGE!?" The death eater repied" We...heard more than one person...in the basement. We figured...that you called for help and dozens...were...already in the room by now. We drew straws to see...who would go in first. Looks like my buddies didn't back me up." the death eater squeeled. "The death eaters are outside." the death eater was slowly making for Goblet's wand, which was hanging loosely from Goblet's pocket. "Well, what do we have to do to make you stay put? Looks like we are going to have to kill you" said Goblet. "That...won't be neccessary, Keith." said the death eater smiling. "What can you do?" asked Goblet smiling back. "This. AVADA KADARVRA!!!"
(the story ain't over)
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There was a flash of green light. Karen backed into the wall, wide eyed. Goblet however, was amazingly alive. "You're supposed to be dead!" Goblet got up,"You are talking to the wrong person." Karen looked down to see the corpse of a death eater, with a look of terror on Karen and the death eater. "What did you do?! Why did you kill him?! He was still a human being, death eater or not!" said Karen, crying her eyes out. "I didn't do anything. If he had used his wand, it might have worked, except I felt my wand going out of my pocket, if anybody uses it but me, the spell always backfires." "So WHAT?! YOU COULD HAVE STOPPED IT!!! YOU ARE EVIL! I WANT OUT, LET ME OUT!" Karen yelled.
Karen went to the door and closed it behind her. "KAREN WAIT!" but it was too late. Goblet went through the door and heard a window break...she was outside. Goblet heard dozens of death eaters yell stupefy. Goblet got out of the basement and looked outside the broken window. One of the death eaters was carrying the fainted body of Karen. Then the death eater layed down Karen near the whole group of death eaters and used a spell to wake her up. "ALL RIGHT," one of the death eaters yelled," THROW ALL YOUR WANDS DOWN TO US AND WALK TOWARD US SLOWLY! THE LONGER YOU TAKE, THE LONGER THIS GIRL SUFFERS!" All of the death eaters were performing the cruciatus curse on Karen, 25 people. "S***! S***! S***!" Goblet thought to himself. Goblet had no choice, if he stayed, Karen will die, if he goes out, Karen will not suffer pain when she dies.
Goblet threw his wand at the death eaters and walked slowly toward the death eaters, feeling braver than he ever felt in his whole life. The death eaters stopped the spell. "Well, where is the rest of you?" asked one of the death eaters. "There is only the two of us. The death eater that came in will never come back out. Send one your people in there. There is nobody else in the house that can help me." said Goblet. One of the death eaters told another one to look in the house. The death eater came back out with the bloody knife in his hand. "The kid killed Emerson with this." The death eater jammed the knife in Goblet's hamstring and Goblet yelled in pain and fell down on his knees. "Now, we are obeying the dark lord's orders. Prepare to die." said one of the death eaters. This was it. When he killed the death eater, there was only one. Now there are twenty five, and Goblet was wandless. "Goblet," Karen started,"I am sorry I called you evil and everything." said Karen with tears all over her face. "I know." responded Goblet. "Karen, is it? Say your prayers." said one of the death eaters. Goblet heard a distant yell. But he knew that doesn't matter anymore. "Avada Kadarvra!" Karen fell back, with a expreesion of terror on her face. There was no doubt in Goblet's mind that Karen was now dead. "Don't be sad, Keith. You will meet her again. Avada Kadarv-" he was cut off by somebody. "EXLEMPRI ENMATON!!!"
Everything that surrounded him was a blur, a big white blur. White? Goblet felt a shockwave and he fell face flat knocking him unconscious. When Goblet woke up. He saw a single man, dressed in solid white, even wearing a white cloak, standing in front of him. Who was it? Goblet didn't have a clue what was going on. Judging by the man's appearance, he definently wasn't a death eater. "Get up, Keith" said the man. He recognized this voice, who could it be? No...it wasn't- "Yes Keith, it's me, your brother, Mithos. Goblet rubbed his eyes. His brother was tall, taller than he was, had solid black hair, in his 20's, and he seemed really strong and ripped. "But, where have you been? Mom and dad are worried sick." asked Goblet repetively. Goblet just remained sitting there, shocked. "Keith, what you did today was heroic." said Mithos. "What-were you just watching the whole thing?" asked Goblet. "Yes, I did. I was also the one who told the death eaters that you were here." replied Mithos. Goblet was dumbstruck, his brother, tried to kill him? "W-why, Mithos? I am your brother. It's me Keith!" said Goblet. Mithos started speaking,"No fatal harm was ever meant to come to you, brother. Rest, Keith. I will explain everything." Goblet just sat there. He didn't know if his brother was hostile or friendly.
"Keith, I killed a lot of death eaters, more than you might think. One death eater, placed a curse on me. A curse that death will come to all of my family. He used a rather complex curse that even probably Dumbledore couldn't perform. I killed him. I thought that all of my family would be all right. How stupid I was. I didn't even check on my family. I learned that a week later, aunt Jane and her husband were killed. I thought it was just a coincidence. Then the rest of the family went to the funeral, everybody except me, you, mom, and dad. The death eater came to the funeral as well and killed everybody that was there. He learned that we weren't there, and went after us. When he came for you first, you know what happened. That death eater you killed, was also the one I killed, the one that placed the curse on me. Now, he's dead. The curse is off. I learned a power during my...secret travels. A power I think you should have, if you are worthy. Judging by all the actions you did, you are more than worthy." explained Mithos. "Take a look around you." Goblet didn't even realize that all the death eaters are dead. He even forgot that there was a knife in his leg. He looked down at the dead body of Karen, but she was still breathing. "Keith, I used a charm on one of deaths eater's wand. That charm made the avada kadarvra spell, rather, incomplete. Karen is just unconscious. That spell I used, killed every single death eater here." said Mithos. He picked up Karen. Now I need to go, brother. I know you have many questions, but they will be answered another day. Now, remember when I used to turn into a gerbil and you a tiger, and you looked more fearsome by comparison? Let's do that now, quickly. I need to be leaving soon."
Goblet did as he was told, without question. He turned into a tiger and growled. Mithos however didn't turn into a gerbil. He turned into something bigger, MUCH bigger. He turned into an enormous demon, a white one with dual golden battle axes. He shot out a big white beam into the air. Goblet looked like a harmless rat. Both of them turned into thier original forms. "I want to you to learn this power, Keith." Goblet was speechless. "Keith, this power is the summoning of The Defender of the Heavenly Gate Demon. I want you to have it." Mithos gave Keith a white gassly sphere, and it immediately shot into Goblet's heart. Goblet was rolling on the ground in pain. "Goodbye Keith, we will meet again." And Mithos hovered off to the distance.
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Please tell me what you think of my story? I don't think I did too good on the ending.
Just reminder that don't hold back if you criticize this.
now I said from the start that I lovedit and the ending made no diffence. In fact it was a very good ending and everything leading up to it made it that more enjoyable. But just to make you feel good cause that's how you are
*evil voice* I hated it every last thing I mean Karen please such a winer. And that ending sucked(not really)
*normal voice* Anyway I loved it and you better write another one fast.
I can't think of another one, need ideas! Too much pressure! *ends up in an insane asylum, with an internet connection!*
Fine I'll start one it will be an rp
I will participate. You know this was originally a rp? But I just did a story instead because it was all laid out for me. And the rp, well I don't think it may lead where I want to in the story if you know what I mean.
That's the beauy off it you never now where someone might take. My sister said that it takes a real man to give up some of his power.lolz
He didn't give it up, just shared it. I am going to think of a another piece of the story. hmmm :-\
lolz ok if you want to in fact start this story over I have an idea. ::)
You mean RP? Okay, but another topic. I will make one in a little bit, maybe right now if I have the time.
yes. ok start whenever you want
Did it. It's in the Gryfindor section.