The small child looked out into the rain, her eyes still red from hours of crying. A man in a dark cloak came up to her, whispering several words in her ear. I couldnt hear much, but I did hear the metion of Voldemort. A small chill ran up my back. The child nodded her head, getting up to walk beside the man. She followed him down the street, turning into a small ally. I follow, my curiousity stronger then my common sense. He took the girl into the back door of a building, her eyes filled with hope. I had noticed her many times on the street before. I assumed she was an orphan, without money or shelter. As the door closed behind them, I walked up, sneeking in behind them. The room was filled with many peope I has seen on WANTED posters, amoung them Lucious Malfoy and Belatrix Lestrage. I moved behind a large group not wanted to be reconized. I saw the child follow the man to a dark table in the back, sitting at the table were Voldemorts closest followers. They aw the child and nodded, murmering something in agreement. I knew that this child was in much danger and that it was up to me to protect her.
(that's awsome!!!can i be in it?)
((its a fan fic not a role play))
(( crap. well anyways. hi i'm voldemort. nice to meet you. ))
((THATS FREAKIN AWESOME, WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!))
Bump! Write more please!
I slowly made my way to the back table. I knew that i had to gain their trust before I could help the girl. They all excanged glances as I came up to them. Belitrix looked allmost surpreised. I gave a half smile and nodded my head.
"I was wanted to prononce myself as one of Voldemorts followers." I clenched my fists, hoping that this was the right aprouch to this situation. Lucious smiled, giving his approval.
"And how old are you... you cant be much older than 17." He questioned, making a chill run up my back. I looked down at my feet, searching for the right words.
"Im 18 Sir... My names Allissa." I stuck my hand out to be shook. Belatrix quickly shot out her hand, shaking it with mine. She motined for me to sit down in the seat next to her. I knew that I was in way over my head, but this was the childs only hope. I looked at the girl, noticing she had strawberry blonde hair and pircing blue eyes. She had a soft smile that looked allmost unused. I smiled at her, wondering if I could ever get her out of this twisted mess. She smiled back, surprising me. I wished that I could have took her in my arms and made a run for it, but I knew a stunt like that would cost two lives so I sat patently, hoping the future wasnt as bad as it looked.
(I LOVE YOUR STORY!!!LOL, IM GOING TO COMMENT YOUR STORIES EVERYTIME I READ IT!!!)
awesome story can someone like call your cell phone or something
((huh???))
"Well Im guessing you will be joining us." Belatrix said, getting up from her seat. "Get that flithy child." She pointed at the little girl, making the child cringe in fear. I looked at her, pain for her in my eyes. I reached out my hands, picking her up. She seemed content, cradled in my arm. I followed the others outside, going though a different door than I had came in.
"Whats your name?" I asked, whispering into her ear. "How old are you?" I smiled.
"Im Noel and Im three years old." She said, her voice soft and baby-like. She held up three fingers, proud of her age. I gave a small giggle, maybe to small to be heard. I looked ahead, noticing that I was starting to fall behind. I wondered, what did they want with this child? Was it Voldemorts idea? I stopped, snapping back into reality. I had to save those questions for later. I picked up my pace, walking right beside Lucious. He kept his eyes ahead, appearing to be fixed on something in the distance.
"Allissa," Belatix motined me over. "I need you to meet me in the Forrbidden Forest tommarow... at three. Bring the child. Untill then goodbye." She turned down another ally, dissapearing. Lucious followed behind. I wondered how I, a Hogwarts student, was supposed to sneek in a child. I walked down the road, my mind clouded, untill I reached my school. I knew that I would have to sleep outside tonight in order to keep the child away from danger. I took of my coat, laying it over her. I layed down on the cold hard ground behind her, and drifted to sleep.
((nat i posted more.. read! lol))
(I know ive already read it. IT SOUNDS INTERESTING!!! U SHOULD TYPE MORE BECAUSE IM BORED!!)
I woke up early that morning, fear keeping me awake. I blinked, my eyes not ready for the bright sun. I streached, yawning. I noticed Noel was still asleap. I gently tapped her shoulder. She opened her eyes slowly, sitting up. She smiled, not knowing everything she was about to face. I wished I could make her understand but I knew that task was nearly imposable. I picked her up.
"Do you need anything to eat?" I asked softly. She nodded, rubbing her eyes. I knew that there was only one place I could to for help, Hagrad. I walked with her, down to his quaint hut. I softly knocked on the door, hearing a creakk. Hagrad smiled but then looked down at Noel questionly.
"Ill explain... after we get something to eat." I said, walking in. I sat down at his large table, setting Noel beside me. Then I looked back to Hargird. "I.. I saw her the other day on the street..." I began my story, spilling out every detail. Hagrad remianed quiet as I finished my story.
"So you have to be back at 3." He said, and I gave him a small nod. "Well why doent you just skip it." I sighed.
"Then Voldemort and Lucious and Belatrix will be upset and come find me!" I wined. I looked back at Noel who seemed contint with her food. "I guess I have no choice."
Hagrid nodded and walked away from the table. I could hear him softly murrmer. "What will she get herself into next?"
(Cool i love the story, its addicting!!! lol
love nat)
BUMPPP!! wow that's really good. Write more~!!
Wow V! That is really good. I knew you could write, but this suprised me! Continue!
Bravo i say Brava
((thanks everyone!!))
I walked out the door. "Thanks Hagrid. I wish I could tell you that I will be fine, but this time I'm not sure." I mummered, pain in my voice. I hoped that I would get to see him again, along with everyone else at Hogwarts. I hoped that this was all a dream but I knew by telling myself though Id be lying. I sighed, I was 17 and in life threatening danger. I kept walking, entering the forest. The sounds of nature surrounded me, keeping me calm. I walked in deeper and deeper, stopping as I heard a voice.
"Allissa! Come here if you can here me!" The voice sharp and pricing. I walked toward it, seeing Belatrix, Lucious, and another man, the one who had brought Noel into this. I walked in front of them, holding Noel a little tighter. I wanted her to feel safe.
"Finnally." Lucious huffed. "I thought that we were going to have to come and get you ourselves. Today we will be going to see the Dark Lord." I flinched at the mention of his name. I hated him with every once of hate within me. I tried to give a half smile, wanting to seem as if I wasn't afraid even though fear shook me inside.
"Come along." Belatrix said impatiently. "We have no time to waste." She started walking, quickly. I followed behind, not wanting to upset her anymore.
"Father wait! I can help too! Please father don't leave me here!" I could hear the whine of no other than Draco Malfoy. "Well if it isn't Allissa. I didn't think that you were brave enough to join the Dark Lord. And that child, is it a mudblood like you?" He sneer when he saw me. I rolled my eyes, wishing he would dissaperate far away from here. I knew that he would just make things worse.
"Why are you even here? No one wants you here so go whine somewhere else. And just to set things strait, I'm a pureblood!" I said, willing to fight back with his harsh words. He backed away slowly, as if he was defeated. I smiled, happy to see him back down to someone. I turned around, walking again as Belatrix and Lucious followed. I glanced over my shoulder, Bellatrix's face proud and Draco and Lucious stunned. I giggled to Noel, whose eyes beamed. I felt more of a want than ever to help her.
It's a very good story, I like the plot line.
Just a few mistakes to look out for...Bellatrix and Lucius for spelling, dear.
Overall, the plot is intriguing, your form of writing is very good, and I'm very much interested in finsing our what happens to Allissa and Noel. Keep it going and I'll keep reading.
Keep going V. It is really good. I can't wait to hear the end!
Mads
((thanks everyone... expecially Ginny. Ill try to improve my spelling lol, its my worst subject.))
I couldnt look at him. I just was too afraid. His voice, it was if it was the wind. It gave you the kind of chills that made you want to hide. I looked down at my feet, the best distraction.
"Allissa, isnt it? Ive been expecting you. Im asumming by what I have been told you are going to help me." Voldemort said, his voice allmost a hiss. I nodded, not knowing anything else. He smiled, turning to Belatrix, giving her permission to talk. She nodded quickly, then turned to me.
"We need you too get someone for us. His name is William Maliton. His assistence is deeply needed." Belatrix said, speaking only business. "He is needed to help us with our... mission." I could tell she didnt want to give anything away. She must have something that I dont want to hear, I thought to myself.
"What exactly is the mission?" I chalenged her words, smirking. I layed my hand on the table, clicking my nails against it. She paused, thinking about what to say. I hoped that she wouldnt keep her knowledge to herself.
"Well we are going to plan an attack, taking over Hogwarts and the Minestry of Magic." She said not giving any details. "But before I can tell you more you need to prove to me your loyalty." She grabbed my arm, taking out a smalll knife. I winced in pain as she made a small cut, forming a mark that I had noticed earlier on her arm also. I knew it was the mark of the Dark Lord, which would burn if I attemped to tell their secrets, burning so bad that I could not speak. Noel looked up at me, her eyes filled with fear and confusion. My heart ached agian, not just for her but for everyone that was going to come into this.
Good, keep going.
i like it!!!
I walked down the hall, keeping my eyes on Noel who was now walking beside me. I had to find William Maliton, who I was assuming was a student here at Hogwarts. I had to lie, saying that she was my cousin who I had to watch over while her parents were away. I hated lying to people but sometimes it seemed the only way. I knocked softly on the Griffindor Commonroom, I had the weirdest feeling that that was were I would find William. I walked in as the door was opened. I looked over to a first year who was reading a book.
"Excuse me but I was wondering if you could tell me if you knew of a William Maliton." I said, as softly as I could be heard. He marked his page and slowly looked up, a mischievous smile on his face.
"Whats in it for me?" He said, shrugging his shoulders. I rolled my eyes, reaching into my bag. I should have known that he would ask something like that, but once again I wasn't prepared. Just like when I dragged myself into this. I found a bag of Chocolate Frogs, irresistible to a first year. I opened it up, letting him look inside. He smiled holding out his hand. I pulled away, wanting my information first.
"Fine Ill tell you!" He sighed. "He is a fifth year Griffindor and hes probably..." He paused, looking at his watch. "... Down in the Great Hall." He said, holding his hands out once again. I dropped the bag in his hands, which he started to devour instantly. I walked away, down to the Great Hall. I grabbed Noels hand, beginning another mission. She looked up at me, her face blank. I smiled at her, and then she smiled back. I knew no matter what came, we had each other.
I LOVE IT!!!(singing)
Very good, keep it up. You're doing a great job.
(singing) I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I WANT SOME MORE OF IT!!
lol
i love singing
love nat
Thanks everyone so much... I didnt think that it would have that many readers!!! Anyways I need a little help, what are the ages for each year?
1st year:
2nd year:
3rd year:
4th year:
5th year:
6th year:
are there anymore years? sorry ive just gone braindead lol
1st year: around 11
2nd year: around 12
3rd year: around 13
4th year: around 14
5th year: around 15
6th year: around 16
7th year: around 17
And that's all the years
OMFG this is so good. I like how made each part short and sweet instead of a giant boring page. Keep it up!!
ok thanks everyone... ill post more tomarrow but i dont have enough time tonight, i have to go cheer! =]
((Sorry it's been forever since I've posted but hopefully I can start my story back up.))
I scurried down the hall, trying to remember the information I had recived and keep Noel within my view.
"William Maliton, William Maliton..." I muttered under my breath. I looked over to Noel again the looked up, coming face to face with a boy a little younger then her, wearing a griffindor scarf.
"Was it my name you were muttering?" He said raising an eyebrow. "If so... What do you want?"
"Uh... Um... Yes I was talking about you. I think. If your William Maliton?" I studdered, taken off gaurd. "I needed your help with something. I would tell you... But I can't... Untill you come with me somewhere." She knew she sounded stupid but she didn't know what else to say. She quickly grabbed his hand, pulling him outside.
"Wha... What are you doing?" He said, but it was too late. I wasn't going to let a 15 year old stop me.
...
"I... I'm back." I said, out of breath. Belatrix laugh echoed though the room and I knew that I was witnessing this boys last breaths.
im like in love with this story