Name: Bucky Maggee (related to Harry but not blood relative)
AGE: 11
Height: Don't Know
Appearance: Wavy hair rockstar look ,Massive shoulders
RACE: Pure
Parents: Sirius Black and Proffesor Maggonagol
Personality: Awsomeness LOL
Likes: Harry (2nd cous) Ron (He Rocks) and Dobby Can't forget him
Dislikes: Slytherins (Blood-Suckers)
Power: Freze time
Abillities:Metamorphus(Like Tonks)
History:I was bullied as a kid untill i learned Self-Deffence
Ok. It was ok for your first time and just getting here like, today. But you need to put a lot more detail in it. Read some of the older ones. Soem other good ones to read would be Billie`s, Sky`s, Ginny`s would be a great one, and Albus`s. You should read some of them, then come back and add to it.
I wasd posting a new one and my time ran out danm
Name: Bucky Maggee (related to Harry but not blood relative)
AGE: 11
Height: 11 inch
Appearance: Wavy hair rockstar look ,Massive shoulders,Hot
RACE: Pure-Blood
Parents: Sirius Black and Proffesor Maggonagol
Personality: scary when i'm angry cool when i'm not
Likes: Harry (2nd cous) Ron (He Rocks),Dogs and Dobby Can't forget him
Dislikes: Slytherins (Blood-Suckers),Turkeys
Power: Frezze time
Abillities:Metamorphus(Like Tonks),young anamagi
History:My Dad was accused of killing Harrys mum and dad
What do I do after I make one of these
okiee jus to let you know that
Siruis is married to Sarah and they have children.. James Annabell and one more I can't remember her name.. and neither of them get on to often.
Theres no Professr Magonagal*Sp*
Harry doesn't post like ever.
Ron doesn't post like ever either.
Try and add more details to it.. its okay for a first try.. but don't forget to add his flaws.. no one is perfect on hpf the closest would be Ginny*Shes been here for like 5 years*
and her charry aint perfect.
Albus's charry is blue *lol* (But blue looks good on him..) ;) lol
My charrys Pete has emotionical issues
Billie has to have human blood and trys to impress everyone
Sky have anger issues *BUT IS STILL AWESOME!!*
Stacey's charry is crazy about attention and like a lot of attention paid to her*STILL PRETTY KEWL THO!*
So see no one if prefect!
Make more about his history its like being Harry and saying *Refer to HP Books 1-7*
It's boring nad some people haven't read all the books..
Maybe you could try and make a charry who is brand new! like in no way related to anyone in the real HP, unless you say like 2nd cousin three times removed lol.. you can be related to them but now sons or daughters... maybe if they were a side kick kinda thing like neville or luna!
Okay just to let you know don't use Voldamort ot be scary.. he aint.. and hes dead.. and if you want to write about Snape make it in past tence..
You can have RPs in the past- Present and Future!!
HAVE FUN!!
and please don't be mad at me I'm jus trying to help you out!
Before Ginny gets ahold of you.. *Shudders in fear at the mention of her name!* lol
Name: Bucky Maggee (related to Harry but not blood relative)
AGE: 11
Height: 11 inch
Appearance: Wavy hair rockstar look ,Massive shoulders,Hot
RACE: Pure-Blood
Parents: Sirius Black and Sarah Black
Personality: scary when i'm angry cool when i'm not
Likes: Harry (2nd cous) Ron (He Rocks),Dogs and Dobby Can't forget him
Dislikes: Slytherins (Blood-Suckers),Turkeys
Power: Frezze time
Abillities:Metamorphus(Like Tonks),young anamagi
History:My Dad was accused of killing Harrys mum and dad and I have done a terrible thing (I told voldie were Harry was) I'm a jerk I know
A little better!
Ahh, welcome welcome one and all. Now all my little newbies, listen up and pay attention to teacher. *smiles painfully*
Hi Bucky, nice to meet you! I'm the girl they refer to as Ginny. So here's how I am going to help you.
I am going to pick apart your bio and list ways to make it better. I do this in order to help you, not pick on you.
Name first. Is Bucky his given name or a nickname? For example, Ginny's full name is Ginvera Molly Weasly, but she prefers to be called Ginny. See what I mean?
Next is the age. Nothing too bad here. But few people are 11 on the forum. You might want to make him a bit older so he isn't one of the youngest and thus viewed as a silly child.
Height...um, 11 inches isn't even a foot tall dear. Since you have him at 11 years old, I'd say about 4'2" give or take a few inches.
Ah, appearance. The most difficult yet most important part. You need to go into more detail. Maybe say...Bucky has brown eyes and light chestnut colored hair that is slightly wavy. His shoulder's are broad, even for a child such as he. Say nothing about how um... "hot" he is.
Nothing to change on race.
Parents...well, you need to change your last name then...and do Sirius and Sarah know of this??
Your personality is rather shallow and pointless here. Especially since he's 11. He can't be all that scary, especially to the kids he's about to meet. You need to be more descriptive here. Describe Bucky in detail! This is another major aspect!!
Likes...well, that's good he likes Harry. And Ron is also amazing. But Harry has WAY too many relatives here. Voldemort as well...especially since on here the two are related....
Dislikes, also ok.
Power: I'd love to work with you on this a bit more. My character does a lot of time dipping, and so you and me could work a great background idea here.
Abilities and power are the same thing.
History is...sad. Just...go read something and retype this, please. For my sanity!
I hope I helped you a little bit, Bucky. Welcome.
Given name:Bucklet
NickName:Bucky
Age:14
Height:4'4"
Apperance:Bucky has green eyes with Darky-Brown slightly wavy hair his shoulders are really broad even for a child
Race:Pure-Blood
Parents:Surius and Sarah Black
Persanality:Bucky is a caring loving child and almost anyone will go out of there way to be his friend
Likes:Harry(God Bro),Ron(My Mate)Dogs,and who could forget Dobby
Dislikes: Slytherins (Blood-Suckers),Turkeys
Power:Bucklet has the abilitie to Frezze time and is also a Metamorphus
History:The reason i was not put in the Harry Potter Books was because of the Surius going to jail delemer
My time now? Okay!
I would have your age eleven, because I think that is your age, and, the right age for your character to begin at, and develop from. I'm sorry, but you can't be Sirius and Sarah Blacks kid, unless you've asked, and it is okay for them.
Please, put some more description into it. In the history, you have to type in your characters past.
Did he get run over by a car, permanently tainting him with an unpleasant scar on his foot?
Did someone throw a rock at him, hitting one of his eyes, and now, he's half blind?
Those things, and not I was not put in the Harry Potter books because of Sirius going to jail delemer.
Okay? :)
And, how can he know Dobby? He died, in the last book!
If you look at the personality, you typed, Bucky is a caring loving child and almost anyone will go out of there way to be his friend. That is a bit... Wrong. You can't really say that anyone would go out of their way, to be his friend. It is just wrong.
I'll give you a list of bios you should read, and learn from. Please, don't read mine, it sucks, and I haven't revamped it in 100 years.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=4413.0 - Ginny's.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=4569.0 -Aaron's.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=4753.0 - Billie's.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=5046.0 -Sky's.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=4581.0 One that I made for another site. It isn't that good now, since I've done a h*ella lot more with Ben now.
Quote from: I loves YOUz on October 9, 2008, 10:50:43 AM
Albus's charry is blue *lol* (But blue looks good on him..) ;) lol
Albus is also paranoid! YaY! :P
Well there you have it! You've met the Awesome Ginny of the site and the YOUNG, but awesome Albus, with everything that me and them have put on here you should be able to make a great Bio! Well good luck!!
QuoteAlbus's charry is blue *lol* (But blue looks good on him..) Wink lol
My charrys Pete has emotionical issues
Billie has to have human blood and trys to impress everyone
Sky have anger issues *BUT IS STILL AWESOME!!*
Stacey's charry is crazy about attention and like a lot of attention paid to her*STILL PRETTY KEWL THO!*
So see no one if prefect!
I don't have anger issues...
..towards some people you dont.. tehe..
O yeah I asked Sarah ages ago and I don't think Surius minds.