Full name: Amanda Linn Johnson
Age:11
height:5''11
Appearance:Shes regular sized.With light brown curly hair.Usally in a pony tail. Shes not very girly usaly T-shirts with Jeans Capries or Sophie Shorts or BasketBall shorts.Shes not skinny but not fat. She has tons of friends and is always with them.
RACE: Shes much like hermonie both parents muggle but her moms parents were wizards.
Parents:She lives with her Grandma and Grandpa after her parents were killed by a muggle hater whan she was 7. Her mom neew her Parents were wizards in lived in the Wizard relm She very Much liked to study Wizard goblins anomorphises warewolfs and almost any other magical Creatures.Her mom and dad meet at a muggle world place called Paris,France.
Personality: Shes athletic and Smart and plays Queditch shes a Seeker .She is also in Griffindor.Shes tough and can break a bone when she needs to.Shes very Bright and Colorful Is entergetic and when Drinks Coffee goes Bonceing of the Walls literaly :)
Likes: Quiditch food Loves to Swim and Goes to a summer Camp for Muggles Called Red Pine Camp.Only one Close friend Cailey knows shes a Wizard.At Camp they love to play pranks on the spoiled think there popular snobbs.
Dislikes: Slithrens and Snakes and Any thing Goth Shes very Bright and Peppy so Goths like Bring her Down.
Power:She is a very stronge and skilled Broom Flyer. She Can also transport perfictly with 2 days of training.
History:She has a slight tendincy to get in fights with Slytherns.She has been kidnapped by Slytheryn familys and been torchered. But some how always escaped with the help of her wand and broom.
See the big fat bar on your keyboard? That's called the Space bar, USE IT! The little button next to Preview saying Spell Check, use that, do reasearch using the the books because Gryffindor isn't spelled Griffindor, Quiddich isn't spelled Queditch. Use Grammar checks too. Maybe write this up on Word Document that has Spell Check and Grammar Check built into it, before you post this up. Slytherin isn't spelled Slithrens, and don't use capitals on small words like bright, snakes, and any. By the way, Anything doesn't have a space between it. Now go and use the Modify button next to Quote, to Modify your post. You also need flaws to your powers.
~ Isabelle Xantier
P.S.: Send your revised version to me and I'll look it over, so you have a much better one. Don't think I'm being mean, I just trying to help since I was once like you, and so you don't get eaten by the older, Senior Members here.
No you are being mean LOL don't lie
NUH UH! Do you see how mistakes there are? I just trying to help!
That was good! It was great for your first effort. Like Isabelle said, you should use spell check, and check your capitalization. Other than that it was good!
Isabelle, that was really harsh. The oldies would only eat her up if she didn't listen... they're normally nice to start out with.
Yeah. HARSH
And Bucky, no need to fill the wound with salt, and tease her.
And this bio was good, only things I can see is grammar and spelling! Good first try.
Oops, Ignore that one comment about the seniors... The bio was way better then what I've seen from, lazy, butt, stupid, people. I'm not pointing at anyone, but they need longer ones. Spaces will help make it longer!
YEAH BUCKY! >:(
QuoteSee the big fat bar on your keyboard? That's called the Space bar, USE IT! The little button next to Preview saying Spell Check, use that, do reasearch using the the books because Gryffindor isn't spelled Griffindor, Quiddich isn't spelled Queditch. Use Grammar checks too. Maybe write this up on Word Document that has Spell Check and Grammar Check built into it, before you post this up. Slytherin isn't spelled Slithrens, and don't use capitals on small words like bright, snakes, and any. By the way, Anything doesn't have a space between it. Now go and use the Modify button next to Quote, to Modify your post. You also need flaws to your powers.
~ Isabelle Xantier
P.S.: Send your revised version to me and I'll look it over, so you have a much better one. Don't think I'm being mean, I just trying to help since I was once like you, and so you don't get eaten by the older, Senior Members here.
What the heck? Sorry, but that was terrible Isabelle! You have no right to say that to a new person. If you see a bio with a few or even several mistakes, kindly suggest how to fix them or point them out in a friendly manor. You listed almost all of her mistakes. I'm sure you meant well, and we're glad you took up the role of assisting, but you've got to work on how you approach the newer members...
Anyway,
Nice bio harrypotterfan#1. Yes, it could use some modifying, but overall, it's really good. Just keep working on your grammar and spelling. I know a lot of J.K's words are confusing to spell and grammar is certainly no picnic.
Welcome to HPFF!
I certainly like the way you have portrait the character amanda. I believes she could do the difference in her life like the harry.
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