Name—Tempest Lamell
Age—16
Height—5'3
Appearance— Medium colored skin, like a dark tan. Hair is very dark and has curls the fall to the middle of her back. Eyes are a light, grayish blue. Nails are always bitten down. Wears very little makeup but always has some on, always. Dresses plainly, nothing too bold.
Parents— died when she was five years old, when they lived they were unspeakables that worked in the Department of Mysteries at the Ministry.
Personality— a quiet girl who mostly keeps to herself but is thoughtful and kind. Goes with the flow of things and is an agreeable person. Highly values trust and loyalty. Highly competitive with people she knows well.
Likes/Dislikes— LIKES: charms class, eating lunch by the black lake, the color yellow, children, making people laugh DISLIKES: is a fairly agreeable person and the only thing she REALLY dislikes is her muggle studies class.
Power—She loves magic involving wind, but has trouble controlling it and is not very good at it. She does however have a special talent for the elemental magics of fire and water
Blood status- Halfblood (neither of her parents were muggles, but her father was a muggle-born)
History— Tempest was born in South Africa but has never lived there and is actually Native American but her parents moved to London from North Dakota when she was three. She lives with her older sister and unmarried aunt when not attending school at Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Both her parents died when she was five. They where murdered by Death Eaters when they refused to give them information about the inner workings of the Department of Mysteries. She and her sister (who currently works for Quality Quidditch Supplies) are often mistaken for each other because they look nearly identical.She loves small children and before she went to Hogwarts she would volunteer at muggle nurseries and daycare centers where she would love to entertain the children with her "magic" tricks.
Very nice bio. Welcome to Hpf. I hope you enjoy it here =)
My only suggestion is capitlization at the beginning of sentencesl
One of the best I've seen! Cant wait to rp!
~WELCOME~
(You can call me Avalee :P)
Welcome to HPF. =)
I`m going to be a little more picky than they were, but I`m just trying to help.
For the Parents section, add their names, please.
And unless she`s really short, you might want to add an inch or two.
The history is a little confusing. She was born in South Africa, but somehow got in the US before she moved to London?
Like Sky said, you might want to check over some capitalize somethings. Just look over your posts before you actually post them.
=)
I`m Stacey.
((I know 16-18 year olds who are 4'11''....))
((I know a 22 year old that is 4'10''))
((Well sorry for being tall. XD ))
=P
((I'm 5'4''....))
I'm 5 foot
thank you! I added an inch to my height, and I think I fixed all the capitalizations. I don't really know how to fix the history though...
The history is confusing. Explain how her parents got to North Dakota, becausr that`s isn`t very clear.
She couldn`t entertain children with magic, because it`s against wizard laws to use magic in front of Muggles.
There really aren`t that many Death Eaters any more, and if there are, they stay hidden most of the time. They wouldn`t go around killing a bunch of people with their numbers so low.
That`s a start for the history. Just try to mess with it a little until it feels right.
Okay okay enough nit picking. Every bio has room for improvement and they will grow with the person. Welcome to the site though and I wish you the best. If you want any pointers or feed back feel free to hit me up or just check out the thread I made about Improving a Bio. Here is the link or you can just look for it pinned on this board.
http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=4506.0