Luke Erik Forlity

Luke Forlity · July 28, 2009, 08:32:35 AM

Okay, well I read the topic for vampires and it said that I could have a vampire character... I'm really confused.

Alexis · July 28, 2009, 11:33:03 AM

I thought there was another topic made later saying you could make vampires?
I'm confused.

Luke Forlity · July 30, 2009, 12:05:27 AM

Yeah me too. That's why I made a vampire. I like to write, and I plan on doing so.

I don't see what the problem is...

Miss Xantier · July 30, 2009, 12:21:17 AM

Well there's too many, this isn't a vampire site. But anyway good bio, and always listen to the bio wizard (Fudge)

Bucky Black · August 6, 2009, 02:24:36 PM

Quote from: Miss Xantier on July 30, 2009, 12:21:17 AM
Well there's too many, this isn't a vampire site. But anyway good bio, and always listen to the bio wizard (Fudge)

Fudge ain't a BIo WIZARD!!

I reckon there is nothing wrong with it. As long as you keep it Harry Potter not twilight related I quote from KIara!!

Miss Xantier · August 6, 2009, 11:16:32 PM

Quote from: Bucky Black on August 6, 2009, 02:24:36 PM
Quote from: Miss Xantier on July 30, 2009, 12:21:17 AM
Well there's too many, this isn't a vampire site. But anyway good bio, and always listen to the bio wizard (Fudge)

I reckon there is nothing wrong with it. As long as you keep it Harry Potter not twilight related Iquoute from KIara!!

There are no vamps. No exceptions.

Bucky Black · August 7, 2009, 07:12:13 AM

Quote from: Miss Xantier on August 6, 2009, 11:16:32 PM
Quote from: Bucky Black on August 6, 2009, 02:24:36 PM
Quote from: Miss Xantier on July 30, 2009, 12:21:17 AM
Well there's too many, this isn't a vampire site. But anyway good bio, and always listen to the bio wizard (Fudge)

I reckon there is nothing wrong with it. As long as you keep it Harry Potter not twilight related Iquoute from KIara!!

There are no vamps. No exceptions.

Do you know her I Do Kind OF

Miss Xantier · August 7, 2009, 07:16:02 AM

no.

Luke Forlity · August 9, 2009, 12:08:30 PM

Well, thanks for trying to come to a conclusion, but are either of you moderators? And if not, can you tell me who is?

potter_fan122 · August 9, 2009, 12:11:59 PM

Ginny Weasly is a mod, and the admin doesn`t come on that often or deal with this kind of problem. Listen to Albus.

Bucky Black · August 9, 2009, 01:06:10 PM

Quote from: potter_fan122 on August 9, 2009, 12:11:59 PM
Ginny Weasly is a mod, and the admin doesn`t come on that often or deal with this kind of problem. Listen to Albus.

I can get Kiara!!

potter_fan122 · August 9, 2009, 01:12:26 PM

Seriously, Luke, listen to anything Albus (Fudge) or Ginny say. They can help you. Kiara doesn`t get on that often, but if she does, she can help you. You`re bio could use some more details, if I were to be honest. You have a good start, but dry putting some more details into it.

I can`t believe I`m saying this, but you might want to read Stacey`s bio. It`s long. It took me a long time to do. You should also read Ginny`s or Albus`s. They can give you some good ideas. Albus would know more suggestions than I can, because he`s been here longer, but that`s what I got so far. Don`t read my bio, really. It`s bad. Read Albus`s.

;) :D

Good luck. :P

fudge0604 · August 9, 2009, 06:55:09 PM

Do not, read, mine.

:D I'm to lazy to update it, and it's semi short. It's so old, it's on the seventh page of bios! :O :D

http://www.harrypotterfan.com/forum/index.php?topic=5948.0 Read this instead

Now over to your bio.

Appearance: A bit short, it misses some details. Like, does he have a big nose? A small pointed one? Big eyes? Small eyes?
It doesn't hurt to take to much. Better to have much, than little.

Personality : Your personality is okay, and that's it! There's no depth in him! Would you write five sentances about yourself?
Your making a fictional character, not an empty shell! It's a real person!

To make an example of what more you can put in: His parents is dead, how does he takes that? He's lived for a long time, that should impact his personality. He's probably seen his friends die several times! Your character doesn't really fit so much as he is after have lived 138 years. Keep it relative.

Likes/Dislikes : Okay enough, add some more.

History: For a person who's lived for so long, it's extremely short. I don't expect like ten paragraphs, but some length. 138 years of peace and no enemies? Don't think so :)

Your bio is overall okay, but it has many holes. And he's got no flaws, seriously.

And please, modify your profile and take my tips, I didn't do this for funziez.

Luke Forlity · August 10, 2009, 01:55:36 AM

Thank you so much Albus! I really appreciate the imput. I'm working on changing the bio right now, so I'll probably have it up soon...

Ginny Weasly · August 13, 2009, 01:06:57 AM

Hi, welcome to HPFF! It's always awesome to have new members who plan on being active. I love it.

I know I'm a bit behind everyone here, but I've been sort of busy outside of this site, so you'll have to forgive me.
However, here's the thing. Miss Xantier and Bucky Black were obviously trying to help you. For that I applaud them, however, much of what they say isn't going to help you at all.
Still young'uns they be.

As for the vampire thing, here's the deal. Many of our wonderful members, new and old, read and loved Twilight. And so they created vampire characters. Good for them (note the sarcasm). However, this is not, in any shape or form, a Twilight website. From what we have read in the HP books, vampires kind of follow along the old way. Sorta scary to look at, problems with the sun, and an irresistible urge to drink the blood of humans. They also don't have souls, so they don't have feelings. Boring to RP with in my opinion.
I'm not saying you absolutely cannot have a vampire character. I am saying, however, that there are way too many and being one is nothing special and in fact seems completely boring to me and my own characters.
If you don't want to be a regular human, use your imagination and come up with a new sort of creature that will comply to the HP universe rules.

As for the general bio, you did a very good job. I've seen much much worse, but I've also seen better. Do as Albus has pointed out and it'll help. He's been tutored by the best (myself and others) and knows what he's talking about.

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me and I'll help you in any way possible.

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